Cogwash (Kobren)
(Not a review, just some notes to help me remember the things I've read. But written this way because it's the Internet, and some people will stumble across this page.)
(Okay, maybe there's a hint of review, because there isn't really much reason to remember much about this novella.)
A free download, from where I don't remember. It might've been reddit, and the person might've asked for a review, so I downloaded it. And then I read it because it was short and I just finished something else.
Anyway, unlike the overwritten self-published books I read recently, this one is a bit underwritten. It could use more details, and, again, an editor. There are, for example, dialogue sequences that need work. You aren't always sure who is talking. One person does something and the other says something in the same paragraph. Or both talk in one paragraph.
There's a prologue that really only sets up the first chapter, and the first chapter is really just a prologue for the rest of the book. We advanced enough to have robots. Then everything collapsed. So we still have robots and hover vehicles, but it's like the Old West out there, which gangs running the towns.
The big "reveal" isn't foreshadowed so much as telegraphed way in advance. However, the characters in the book don't see it because they think the guy is dead. No one could have survived being dumped in bandit territory like that. Which, come to think of it, it wasn't really explained how he could survive. The only shocking thing is that the other character from Chapter 1 doesn't make another appearance.
Terminology nit: I get that he wants to evoke the Old West (even though it's the future, after some bad times), but "hover coach" and "hover horse" get old fast. And anyone living in those times would just call them a "coach" or a "horse", particularly since the non-hover variety are nowhere to be seen. Moreover, you'd think someone might say "car" or "bike" (or "cycle").
Similarly, when every gun is a "plasma thrower", there really isn't much need to keep saying "plasma thrower". Also, the slug from this gun (is it a handgun? a rifle?) can temporarily take down a robot but when the doctor takes one in the shoulder, he's fine. He's had worse than that. Not that there are any other doctors around who can patch him up.
For all that, I didn't hate this book, and unlike the previous book of this caliber, I stayed with this one to the end. With work, it could be a book for middle graders. (He might have to remove the one more particularly grusome attack, but that's just me, and probably change the reason for the first sherrif's departure.) Middle schoolers might also appreciate the cipher in the text that seems to be there for no reason other than to have a cipher in the text. It was obviously not a date (because no dates are given) but the next most obvious cipher didn't make much sense. Except that it was the most obvious thing (which gets explained painfully) and there was a reason for it in the story, although no reason why robots would be babbling it over and over.
(Note: it's so obvious a code that I translated the final message in the back of the book in my head without using a pencil. I just read it. Maybe a little slower than I would read this paragraph, but it wasn't rocket science.)
I added the "Steampunk" tag, but it really isn't. It's robots in the new Old West, but otherwise, not really steampunk-y at all.
This was a quick one-day read. Nothing serious.
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